Excellent story! Great characterizations. Perfectly paced. While I'm not normally a fan of present tense narration this worked extremely well. (Wish I could say the same about my keyboard. It's having some sort of tantrum.) Looking forward to reading more from you.
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Date: 2011-06-11 05:33 am (UTC)